Just Like A Stone


beaten and battered
unbroken and unbent
tossed here and there
I remain
strong and sturdy as the stone

wet with the dew of heaven
dried in the sun
I dined with the grass of the earth
I defied the wind and waves
of the world
not a grain
can be wrung from me

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7 thoughts on “Just Like A Stone

  1. The funky Funke… na so! Poem on point. Little thought to chew: can you remove the full stops?  All of them. It will do the poem a world of good.

    And I am thinking, for alliteration and cooler effect, consider

    ‘beaten and battered

    unbroken and unbent”

    In the last line of the first stanza, you can take out the ‘and’ which starts it all.

    Consider taking out the ‘and’ at the end of the next line too.

    In the last lines, I wonder, how do we jump from wind and waves to dime ? Is there really a connect? I’m thinking you should consider using something that is related to nature to replace the dime. ..

    My thoughts. 

    Over all, well done sis!

    From:”Olufunke Kolapo” Date:Fri, 11 Sep, 2015 at 16:09 Subject:[New post] Just Like A Stone

    Olufunke Kolapo posted: ” beaten but unbroken battered but unbent; tossed here and there, I remain strong and sturdy as the stone. wet with the dew of heaven and dried in the sun. I dined with the grass of the earth. I defied the wind and waves of the world, not “

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    1. Wow!
      Thank you kindly, sir.
      Full stops checked.
      Alliteration effects, taken.
      Do you think the “and” in the last line of the first stanza should be killed? I’ll have “strong sturdy”

      You are right about the jump from wind and waves to dime…. would “grain” do?

      Maybe I should remove the stanza?

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      1. Funky sis, bawo? Sorry I didn’t see this earlier. I think the poem looks better as it is now.
        It is in italics? Is that deliberate? Even if it isn’t, let it be… There’s a stylistic beauty to it in this form. You know, we are talking about the wind and the wind slants things… so, that gives it an added style to flow with the content.
        Nicer poem now jare. Cool.

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